- Lead #1 (Narrative)- Coach McNeil isn’t your average Geometry teacher. He’s far from it, actually. With 23 years of coaching experience, and many years of playing sports before that, sports have had a major influence in his life.
- Lead #2 (Descriptive)- As he looks at his football team playing out in the field, Coach McNeil gets a look in his eyes that shows his passion for sports and also shows that he loves doing what he does.
- Lead #3- “I spend part of my day, everyday, around sports, whether it be playing it or coaching it,” says Coach McNeil. “Honestly, I love sports. They allow you to learn things that you otherwise probably would have never learned.”
Monday 11 April 2011
Feature Story Leads- ACM
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I like the 3rd lead, the others were good but they didnt really pull me in. I liked all of them though :)
ReplyDelete-BJG
I think you should insert the third lead right after the first one, and make an awesome lead paragraph :)
ReplyDelete-RAD
I also like the third one it gives more incite than the others.
ReplyDelete-CLN
i liked the first one. Try to make it end with a question though. make the reader want to keep on reading. is there anything you found that was really interesting that you can do some foreshadowing for?
ReplyDeleteI like the 1st and 3rd ones the best. Mesh them together to make a really great lead. Include the quote establishing him as a coach, then slide in the fact that he is a Geo teacher too.
ReplyDeleteKathy H.